The most helpful piece of peer advice that I received was that I should continue with my multiple opinions and different looks on the grieving process that most people endure after losing a loved one, but that I shouldn’t overcrowd my paper with them. It seemed from my peers that my greatest strength is the flow of how I write. I write as if I’m talking and it seemed that its a good thing (usually english teachers hate me for it). I know I need improvement of analyzing the original essay more than just saying what I feel about it or about Strayed’s issues and as I continue writing I will probably need improvement on keeping the flow of my paper. I have a few ideas but I’m not scared of asking for help.